Addiction

Addiction is a dangerous thing ,
you said. Part yourself for it may
feed on your life ,

as you sprayed the wild fields
of my self germinating thoughts
with the pesticide of reason.

But a forest of lush poetic plants
grew to mock your plans; they
rose to fetch me oxygen
when I needed it most.

You can’t leash your breaths ,
I say. The addiction of life
isn’t that bad a thing, after all.

14 thoughts on “Addiction

  1. …you sprayed the wild fields
    of my self germinating thoughts
    with the pesticide of reason.
    !
    !
    Sweeeeet !🙂
    Your words have brought a smile on my face🙂

    ‘You can’t leash your breaths ,
    I say. The addiction of life
    isn’t that bad a thing, after all.

    So true!🙂

  2. bliv_in_magic

    i really admire the unknown(to u) resilience dt u carry within..

    i loved d nw ‘missin’ post as wel😉

    1. It was meant to be resilient and I’m glad it conveyed the point.
      Thanks for the comment🙂
      And who knows if the ‘missin one’ reappears in the near future😉

  3. Ayesha

    ‘as you sprayed the wild fields
    of my self germinating thoughts
    with the pesticide of reason.’

    I think that is what Taliban do. They spray and kill one’s thinking ability.
    Don’t know, who is referred to here though😛

    I can see you experimented with that poem which in fact is very nice🙂

  4. Beautifully said !
    Wow !! You just keep getting better, Aadil🙂
    Just a lil suggestion > I THINK if you change the tense of the second stanza from ‘past’ to ‘present’, it would read better & also be in consonance with the rest of the poem.
    But then…that is how “I” feel. You are a better judge.
    Wonderful words, no denying that !🙂

    1. Thank you, Cav. I was looking for that kind of a comment, some suggestions for improvement as I am not in a right frame of mind to write well rounded, coherent stuff (I’ve never been, actually but days are sort of very distracting). So, I’ll incorporate the edits as per your suggestion which obviously is good. Thanks for having a look🙂

    1. No clue. Dunno what’s she done with her blog😦

      She has done it before when she deleted her google blog to leave us shocked before reappearing in the wordpress world. So, she might have some plans.

  5. spotlesssoul

    But a forest of lush poetic plants
    grew to mock your plans; they
    rose to fetch me oxygen
    when I needed it most.

    Beautiful (:

    Ermm.. though am a bit stuck at idea though (: But that rather defines the differences in our opinions. So let’s just forget that (:

    Keep up the good work. It’s worth-reading.

    1. Thanks!🙂 But I’d still like your comments for the improvement of the idea, for I can alter the poem anytime for good. Or did the idea not work at all?

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