Writing Melancholy

When the ferocity of pain

pierces the bounds of reason,

gushing in to the realms

of my mind,

and floods the corridors

of my heart;

when it rises up the levels

of strangulating heights

and just when I’m about

to drown in its tides,

I hold on to my pen

which inks the excessive

water, shaping it

to words and phrases.

Thus I’m unburdened

but the brazen words

never cease to invoke

sympathy, as though

the pain was maltreated.

19 thoughts on “Writing Melancholy

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  2. “Thus I’m unburdened

    but the brazen words

    never cease to invoke

    sympathy, as though

    the pain was maltreated.”

    Brilliant, Aadil! Just like pictures and paintings often fail to give soul to the subject, so does words often fail to do justice with the emotions.

  3. “and just when I’m about

    to drown in its tides,

    I hold on to my pen

    which inks the excessive

    water, shaping it

    to words and phrases.

    Thus I’m unburdened”

    Atleast You are blessed with the quality to ‘deal’ with pain🙂
    So you are not THAT much helpless🙂

  4. Asma Ahsan

    You write your thoughts and pain out – thats a gift in itself.

    This poem is writtn very very well. You are becoming more articulate as each day passes.

    Why dont you write a poem for me: I SPEAK WITH MY HANDS – you can definitely write that since you do SPEAK with your hands😛

    send it for the magazine. I will put it up, as I did on my web ages in the past.🙂

  5. @nadia, Nayni and Asma Jee .. Thank you all for your encouraging comments.🙂 Asma .. I’ll love to write on the topic once I’m relieved from the jumble of office work that’s eating my brain. Thanks for the invite!:)

  6. Cavaliere

    You re always a step ahead of yourself !🙂
    Btw…I suggest you to revise this: “strangulating heights” (my suggestion shouldn’t be taken very seriously though :))

  7. Asma Ahsan

    Cav – be confident when you suggest grammer suggestions.😛

    Aadi – Strangulating heights – hmm — basically one gets dizzy and feverish at heights if one is scared of them – its based on some inner fear usually – or a problem with eyesight. Weak eyesight means you have height problems. The nerves cant take the air pressure or something technical like that.

    So definitely stangulation of the senses is one way to look at it.

    You could try to find another word, if you like,😛 that describes a phobia of heights – like vertigo maybe – some kind of good solid word that describes the exact feeling of a person at a height looking down and feeling as if his breath is being strangled out of him.

    And – Please – MY suggestion should ALWAYS be taken VERY VERY SERIOUSLY – ok Bro?😛😛😛

  8. @Ayesha .. Thanks!🙂 You are very right, for writing is an excellent way to vent out all that is disturbing.

    @Cavaliere .. In other words I should be in my limits otherwise confusions like ‘strangulating heights’ will produce even now and then😉

    Now if we take our body as a vessel and fill it up to the throat, one would find it very difficult to breath hence a feeling as if one is being strangulated. That’s the context which produced the phrase ‘strangulated heights’ .. I might not have been able to convey it the way it should have been taken. Hope I’ve cleared the point which doesn’t mean I’ve shut the door to further suggestions from you worthy readers. I hope you’ll guide me along🙂

    @Asma .. What u say❓ Your suggestions surely are dear to me🙂

  9. shobig

    Fantabulous poem yaar! There are some language and grammatical mistakes indeed, but you have come a long way and these will also be dealt with gradually. It’s a masterpiece otherwise, and the paradox you so beautifully concealed in the final verses

    as though
    “the pain was maltreated’

    have exalted your poetic caliber to new heights.

  10. @ Shobig .. I’m elated! Whatever I’ve learned or improved in my poetic journey wouldn’t have been possible had I not met people like you who are sources of encouragement for me to step into the lands unknown and discover new horizons.
    Keep suggesting!
    Keep commenting!🙂

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